hrmm...
This was a really strange piece, I dunno if I would label this trance, this was like some extremely dissonant stuff. Trance usually has more of a hook, a catchyness to it, whereas this really isn't ever in the right key with itself. I think you need to work on the actualy songwriting, because this sounds like they are just random notes tossed at eachother.
Also, the song is clipping throughout, sounds like you need to slap a few compressors on everything.
-ac-